Erica Liu
Writing 2 3:00 PM
Dr. Heidi Emmerling
11/15/2005
Abstract
Malaria Vaccine Proves Effective in Clinical Trial
Objective: The objective of the research is to find a new vaccine that stimulates human immune cells to recognize and kill malaria parasite.
Methods: Pierre Druilhe who led the study said that Malaria is a parasite carried by mosquitoes. Druilhe and his colleagues used merozeoite surface protein 3 (MPS-3) identified in adults who had proven resistant to the disease. They paired antibodies to MSP-3 and were able to clear a blood sample of the parasite.
Result: Every vaccinated sample produced immune response to malaria, and 77 percent produced anti-MSP-3 antibodies. These antibodies worked as well as the antibodies in the immune adults and in some cases even better.
Conclusion: This vaccine shows long-lasting promise, and it is proven effective in mice experiments.
Keywords:
Malaria
Parasite
Vaccine
Merozoite surface protein (MPS-3)
Writing 2 3:00 PM
Dr. Heidi Emmerling
11/15/2005
Abstract
Malaria Vaccine Proves Effective in Clinical Trial
Objective: The objective of the research is to find a new vaccine that stimulates human immune cells to recognize and kill malaria parasite.
Methods: Pierre Druilhe who led the study said that Malaria is a parasite carried by mosquitoes. Druilhe and his colleagues used merozeoite surface protein 3 (MPS-3) identified in adults who had proven resistant to the disease. They paired antibodies to MSP-3 and were able to clear a blood sample of the parasite.
Result: Every vaccinated sample produced immune response to malaria, and 77 percent produced anti-MSP-3 antibodies. These antibodies worked as well as the antibodies in the immune adults and in some cases even better.
Conclusion: This vaccine shows long-lasting promise, and it is proven effective in mice experiments.
Keywords:
Malaria
Parasite
Vaccine
Merozoite surface protein (MPS-3)
posted by happy1987me at 4:45 PM
21 Comments:
After talking about abstracts today in class I think yours is a very good example. You stated the objective, process, data and conclusion. The only question I have is if it should be written in the past tense or kept in the present because the experiment has already been performed....Very good though!
To: Erica
From: Steven Maltz
The topic of your abstract is interesting and I enjoyed reading it. I like the format you used for your abstract, but I think there are a couple errors that you might want to fix. The first two sentences of the Method section of your abstract really do not seem to have anything to do with a method. You can reword your sentences so that they include Pierre Druilhe, but the way you currently have the Method section worded should be reconstructed. You should briefly say why or how MPS-3 was used in adults. How were these adults chosen? Additionally in the Conclusion section you randomly say something about mice, which leaves the reader wondering what the mice have to do with an experiment where adults are being tested. Do the mice play a role in the experiment? You also may want to lengthen your abstract just a little bit because it does not seem like it is complete.
Overall you did a great job.
I thought your abstract was very good and I liked the topic becuase it's one that most people aren't very familiar with so it will be very informative to most readers. I thought your format was very good and exactly what is expected from an abstract. You have a few grammatical errors to correct but I'm sure you'll do that before you turn it in. I also agree that the whole mice thing that you included in the conclusion doesn't really fir with the rest of your abstract because up to the conclusion you hadn't mentioned mice at all. Other than that I thought it was done very well!
Hey Erica,
Awesome layout. Exactly what an abstract is supposed to be. I just have to comment on how the first sentence in your methods section really doesnt seem to belong there.
Tyler Watkins
Erica,
Very interesting topic because not many people know to much about it. Other than a few grammar errors and some rewording of sentences it was good.
Carlos
Erica,
I think that you did a very good job following the structure of the abstracts that we discussed in class. The use of headings makes the abstract easier to follow and understand. One thing that I would recommend is to expand on your conclusion. Other than that I thought that you did a good job.
Jeff Y
I really like the use of the headings. It is organized very well, and you include the key words at the end of the abstract. Good luck on you final draft.
I also think that you have done a very eleagent job applying what we learned in class about abstracts on to your own abstract. ITs very clear and precise, just like a sceintific paper should be.
A couple of your sentences sound a little bit awkward, mainly the first two I think. But other than that you've got everything there and have used good formatting, good job.
Erica,
I like how you organized your abstract, and divided your summary in that style. It's very straight to the point, and easy to read.
Liz K.
I thought your abstract was very well put together. the only suggestion would be to look it over once for grammatical errors, other than that, great job.
-Liz
I really enjoyed reading your abstract. You give a concise description of your experiment. The only thing i was confused about is the ver last part where you introduce the mice. you might want to introduce them a bit earlier. Overall good job.
Erica- I think that your abstract is very well written. It has a very scientific feel to it and I like that it is short and to the point. I think that in order to improve this piece you should reword the first part of the sentence at the start of the METHODS section so it does not say "who led the study said that." This doesn't seem to fit with the tone of your piece.
Carolyn Tallman
Very good job and i extremely enjoyed your subject. You just need to insert the key terms and your abstract will be great. Goiod job
You seem to already have the format down for an abstract, and I couldn't seem to find anything wrong with your assignment other than a one or two grammatical errors. Seems good to me!
_clarissa e.
Dear Erica,
You definetly have the proper layout and structure well done, the only thing you might want to look at are how some of your sentences are structured and look over for grammatical errors, but overall not bad. good luck on your final draft
eric
Dear Erica,
I agree with what most the others said. I think you did a very good job with the formatting; it looks just like an abstract should. I also think you should change the beginning of your method section because it doesnt really fit in. I'm not sure how long your original article was, but if its possible maybe you could lengthen the abstrace a few sentences to make it sound more complete. Good Luck
Your abstract is very good and fits the form discussed in class.
i thought the first sentence in your methods seemed a little out of place though. It would also be helpful to expand more in the conclusion.
Very nicly done. You followed the format correctly and came off inteligently. Your writing is also clear and consice. This adds to the overall professionalism of your peice.
Matt
Hey Erica,
I don't have much to say about your abstract, except that it is really good. You did a good job laying it out. And I really like the topic because my organization is always raising money for that cause in Africa. Once again, good job on your abstract.
I really like your abstract. Everything is clear and easy to look at. One thind I would change is in "objective", take out "the objective of the research". Just get right into it. Anways good joob!
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