Matt Mirau
11/14/2005
Writ 2 Emmerling
MW 3-4:50
Abstract
Clam Enhancement Trials in the Bay of Fundy
The objective of this research is to examine techniques used to harvest the soft-shelled clam, Mya arenaria, in the Bay of Fundy in order to determine ways to increase productivity. Rotational digging, using a biennial harvest, showed a two-fold increase in catch-per-unit-effort over the annual harvests (13.9 kg/digging vs. 6.5 kg/digging). The process of brushing, placing artificial barriers on the beach to increase the natural rate of spat settlement and survival, is successful in some habitats but cannot be used to restock a barren beach. Relaying clams from high density beaches to those depleted from harvesting resulted in favorable economic conditions; the ratio of the resource to the cost of relaying the animals ranged from 2:1 to 3:1. The conclusion derived from these experiments show that the enhancement efforts all seemed to work to a certain extent. This was achieved on an experimental scale, so the next step is to perform the trials at a larger pilot scale.
This was from an article from The Science Review of the Bedford Institute of Oceanography, Gulf Fisheries Centre, Halifax Fisheries Research Laboratory, and the St. Andrews Biological Station.
11/14/2005
Writ 2 Emmerling
MW 3-4:50
Abstract
Clam Enhancement Trials in the Bay of Fundy
The objective of this research is to examine techniques used to harvest the soft-shelled clam, Mya arenaria, in the Bay of Fundy in order to determine ways to increase productivity. Rotational digging, using a biennial harvest, showed a two-fold increase in catch-per-unit-effort over the annual harvests (13.9 kg/digging vs. 6.5 kg/digging). The process of brushing, placing artificial barriers on the beach to increase the natural rate of spat settlement and survival, is successful in some habitats but cannot be used to restock a barren beach. Relaying clams from high density beaches to those depleted from harvesting resulted in favorable economic conditions; the ratio of the resource to the cost of relaying the animals ranged from 2:1 to 3:1. The conclusion derived from these experiments show that the enhancement efforts all seemed to work to a certain extent. This was achieved on an experimental scale, so the next step is to perform the trials at a larger pilot scale.
This was from an article from The Science Review of the Bedford Institute of Oceanography, Gulf Fisheries Centre, Halifax Fisheries Research Laboratory, and the St. Andrews Biological Station.
posted by mattmirau at 5:20 PM
25 Comments:
Well I thought your topic was pretty funny because it's something I have never thought about. But I thought you wrote your abstract very well and it was very informative. The only thing that really sticks out to me that you might think about revising would be to add a couple of sentences to the end of your abstract so that it is concluded better becuase the way it is now just seems to cut off the abstract when there is more to be said. Other than that I think it's pretty good!
Just like Eva said, I have never really put much thought into clam digging. I usually think about it as a popular hobby on the east coast. I am not positive what the exact format is of an abstract but what you wrote appears like one to me. The language was scientific and maybe a few re-constructions of sentences here and there it will be very well written. What interested you in the topic?
Matt~
Very random topic but a good one at that. I enjoyed reading it because it is an interesting topic and I appreciated the information you presented. I would suggest a catchier title and maybe make it a tad bit longer. Other than that, good job.
Matt,
I really enjoyed reading your topic, its pretty random but good nonetheless. We were the unlucky ones because we had to do this abstract without knowing much about it, well at least I didnt, but it seems like a good format. i would recomend a better title and a stronger finish. good job overall.
hey matt,
good job, i really enjoyed your piece, and it was pretty interesting. the only thing i would suggest is that when i was looking through abstracts i noticed they usually write key terms at the end, so maybe you might want to do that, i did it in mine, but neither me you or jose know much about abstracts so, who knows maybe im wrong . i also agree with the other four who have posted, you might wants to finish with a little stronger ending, but other than that, good job.
To:Matt
From: Steven Maltz
Your topic is very interesting and I enjoyed reading your abstract. You definitely seem to know what you are talking about and you seem to use proper scientific diction. Overall you did a great job, but I do think you need to break up some of your longer sentences into shorter ones. I thought your abstract was a little confusing so by shortening your sentences you will make your abstract clearer. You also need to use some transitional words or sentences because you immediately jump from one idea to the next. Lastly, make sure you use footnotes for information you obtained from scientists or researchers in the article. Overall I think you did a great job and your final copy should be successful.
I really liked your abstract it is similar to the ones I found on line. you summarized the objective, methods, and results. Good job!
Sincerely,
Erica Liu
Matt,
I found your topic to be very interesting. I would have never thought that digging up clams would be this complicated. It definitely seems like you did your research and know exactly what you are talking about. The only thing that I would recommend would be to expand on your conclusion. You present all of this great information and then it just seems like you cut your paper off. Other than that I think you did a good job.
Jeff Y
Hey,
Great topic choice! The one thing i would like to say is that you could perhaps shorten a few of your sentences. It was just make it easier on the reader. Other than that, im sure everyone enjoyed your peice.
Tyler Watkins
Matt,
Fun topic. Ha! I like how you included the scientific jargon. It looks like you knew what you were doing, so...good job.
Liz K.
Your abstract was very informative, but i think that you can explain some things a ittle better, i kind of got confused a little bit because I am not too familiar with the whole clamming industry, but for those who are in this field i am sure that it would make more sense. It sounds good though, good job.
Clam digging. now if this where for profit and for bringing back clams to the beaches taht where depopulated cool. but for comercial reason too though, i think that might bea littly fishy. i would rather have all thsoe refirbished areas supplement do that there is enough to go aroudn after harvest.
Good article, it reminds me of little tidbits popular science does sometimes with articles abnout this sort of thing.
Just check yur grammar on this and it should be fine.
i think this was an amazing choice for a topic. clam digging is an up and coming sport. haha. anyways, i like the topic, and i think it is well written. however, i think you need to expand your thoughts at the end a little more. also, make sure you add a lst of key words that would be used to find your abstract.
jeff lamb
I too liked the topic you choose; it's something that you wouldn't expect to learn about. I thought it was very informational and other than a few grammatical errors, i would suggest to work a little more on you concluding senteces. Overall, good start!
_Clarissa E.
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It looks good and was fun to read, but I have two changes to suggest. First of all, what are "spat settlements"? Second, you say "some habitats", it would be better to say which habitats. These suggestions will make your abstract more clear. Otherwise, I liked it!
ALthough clams are something that I really never think about, this was a good abstract. It was very informative. The only suggestion is that some of your sentences seem like run-ons. SO just look over those. Besides that, great job.
-Liz
I agree with everyone on how random the topic is, but i really like it, who would of thought you could write an abstract on clam research. The only thing i would suggest is changing the first sentence to say,"The research objective is", this just makes the beginning sound better. Good Job
I think an abstract needs to be more of an introduction then just explaining a bunch of different things. Your giving you paper context by basically summing up you whole issue in the abstract. do that. I dont think that the topic is that random, i like your ideas and where your going with them. Just clean it up a bit.
Matt-
I think that you choice an interesting topic and something most people do not ever think about. I think that it might help to make you abstract a little longer or more in depth to help give a better idea of clam digging. I really enjoyed how you talked about what was to come next at the end of your abstract.
Matt,
Clams are very interesting and it seems you know what you are talking about. Like everyone else some sentence structure would make it clearer and footnotes. Other than that good job.
Carlos
CLAM! This was a pretty cool little abstract. Whether or not this is how an abstact is supposed to be worded but you came off knowledgable. Cut the entire peice down by a few sentences to make it an easier read. Other then that, nothing. Good luck
I'm not sure if you are supposed to have a "key terms" part at the end but the other two people did it, so maybe you are suposed to. I liked your topic because I didn't really know much about the topic of clam digging. I thought you did a good job sumarizing; it was very concise. All in all I thought it was a very good rough draft.
Matt,
I thougth that you abstract was really good. For a second, I really thought that I was reading a real article. Very good job on your first abstract. I didn't really notice any problems with it except that I think you forgot to capatalize the "A" in the lady, Mya's, name. Other than that, good abstract.
This is a very good abtracts. It summarizes well and you get to your point quickly. I liked also how you clarifed a lot of the words you were using. Good Luck on you final draft.
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